Refining.

The story i first made was shit....let's be honest. So i scrapped it and tried to refine a story that wasn't well.....shit.

Once upon a time deep in Afghanistan there were a group of soldiers who were in a squad named "C-squad).

Everyday they would patrol the roads in a bulked out Jeep. Mounted with guns and a bulletproof shell it was perfectly weighted and able to move over terrain quickly.

One day, after missing a roadside bomb the Jeep and the squad were thrown into the air as the explosion caught front wheel. The Jeep landed with a thud and there was nothing but the roaring flames of the car.

This lead to one of the soldiers dying after the weight of the drop crushed his neck, his name was Sgt Dawson and he had a wife and son back at home.

Because of this the 3 soliders who survived pledged to stay alive for his sake and make sure they personally told his wife (as a group) about how he died and the man he was.

The day came when the men were allowed to take leave. Although all 3 men lived miles away from each other all 3 of them decided to travel to the house of Sgt Dawson and tell his wife the bad news (she had received a letter already) but the men felt it would be better for them to go.

When they arrived at Dawson's house they passed his personal belongings onto Mrs Dawson and told her the story of both what happened and the man he was.

Now obviously i was still using some of the sentence starters from the previous task but this was just the basic, i refined it again later on.

We were then "kind of" asked to categorise our "story", i wrote it as a kind of group/family thing with the over riding word being "friendship" i tried to implement the idea of honour and loyalty into the group.

So as Steve said it's a kind of "Buddy story" the kind of story you could imagine "You're my best friend" to play over (Although that would seem hugely out of place in a war film where someone dies) but yeah...you get the point (I hope).